I wrote this when i was 14, i find the idea very cool but the writing style needs help.

Prologue

The clouds are all we ever see any more. Mother says that once the sun shone bright and unmolested by clouds. I, my self, have never seen it. My mother describes it as an awesome sight. She, only eleven when she last saw it, can only see it in her mind and she says her description is not as it really was. She says it was like a hot oven warming the world, like an oven warms a house. It was so very bright to look at it would make you see spots. The sun has not been seen for twenty years. Neither has the moon, for children and teenagers, like my-self, it is a fairy tale that we all love to hear over and over again.

The world is bleak now. All the major cities have been deserted of men and woman alike, all over sixteen. Except for a few lucky one’s, they all just disappeared. Next month is my 16^th birthday and if I am not careful I too might disappear, were to? No one knows.

No one knows were you go when you turn sixteen you just disappear. If you ask me it’s freaky only a few have escaped being taken away or disappearing. All our grandparents knew what was going on but they died before they could pass the secret on.

The cities are deserted; no one goes up at daytime. (We can tell its day only by a light glow over the clouds.) All stay under ground. Mom says that when the sun disappeared that every one went underground and built shelter houses thirty feet below ground level.

Every one lives middle continent now or under mountains because on the outer edge as we call it (mom calls it the coast) we are to close to the water and can’t dig very far without drowning. Mom says we live like moles, whatever they are. We walk the streets at night, only kids stray above ground, we take or plunder what we can to live on for the next day, it’s not stealing no one owns any thing when it’s above ground.

My name is Althea, many a time during the day I wander if they will find my mom or me and take us away, or if this is my last day with my mom. My dad is already gone and so is my older brother Mitchell.

Brethell but no one else knows my true name. Mom is calling I must go

Yours, devotedly Althea.

April 21 2509 AD

only the first part should i post more??????